《英语写作基础》辅导(十) 如何使句子简练

《英语知识》月刊1999年第10期总第121期《英语十写作基础》辅导如何使句子简练大连艾辉写作要求以最精炼的语言直截了当地传递信息和表达思想无论是汉语还是英语恐怕没人愿看废话连篇的文章。然而大多数人都很。难做到一遍成型对草稿不删不减更不用说初习写作者;因此遣词。造句须反复推敲能删则删须缩则缩避免使用多余词句累赘的句子都有碍于有效地达到目的会引起读者的反感语言不简练的句子就很令人费解Into:任何”罗嗦例如下面1e。hispapldeoer1an、planningtodeseribethehobbythatjneoyeol-leetingInanmieboks’Ferered5opinionhethinksthateabletelevisionhasalreadyhangeddaltTdourlivnreshereareanyhistorianswhoaeeeptthethesis改进后的句子去掉了呀嗦部分1Fe:jndnoyteolleetingtoldeomiebtex〕ksrehinkshistorthanseablePtlehevisiotnhasehangedourlivesMayiaaeeethesis要使语言简练具体的坡减或改进办法包括以下几种1lsuee:将词组紧缩为单词)fAter。beingpltsmmsoroomHeHtedHenryorganized、everaladearpaignns立业竺ssesfulterresuAfA2PresPorPorttioionnryyto啥艰tanizeizseddseverallsueeessfuladseampaignfteronenroanseveraadeampaignfimrlysueeessfullydt)nTt’5ehedeetatnesagainshelaverysystems:l即orteheideT3isioh二旦竺竺芝s旦卫互旦tta`seeryfimrltreasuppousrtedtheprnsidedsent’5deeisiouansor)Myhityeaehteda。hisfrieonan明lfotingwithhim49Myhis4HtoryttoeaehereStreatn记innusashis旦旦竺竺!frieurndas)Heerantohttatsiotthepotingingrainininhurryhurriedthetaioinhepourra以上4句改进后5)war意思与原句基本相同ren。Havingnopatsthe扣erungrllgneverexperienedeamilyfmthPTarentlessthe扣uyounnggirggirlnevexPeperrieneedfamilywarmtharheparentleslneverexieneedfamilywmth置于句首的单个形容词与分词短语语法功能等同都说明原因;也可将单个形容词与主句合并但这样缩改会对句子的意思有所改变具体在写作中使用哪种方法要根据上下文的情况而定2。。将从句紧缩为词组。(l)Wht两分句主语一致仅用介词词组可表达从句的内容en。如ere:1wasonmywaytosehole1notieedthestreetswquieterhanusualOnmyway.roseholr1notiedthestreerswerequieterthanusual(2)Tpor两分句主语一致从句可改为分词形式ou。如r:htghohehadwoekedhardallthetimeHenyfailedtopa哭theimtanprufieienytestThoporghhavi眼workedhfieieneardallthetimeHenryfailedtopastheim-tan之porytest(3)形容词从句可改为同位语Billeo。如:Garteswyaohyouisa扣ungsftwoaredeveloperreuolvtionizedthemputeindu、trsBillinate玉〔ngsftwaoredeveloperrevolutionizedtheeomputerdustry(4)有两个从句时可将前面的一个改为形容词短语简化为一个从句impo。OrnedayoMyteaeheesrwhotaughthistorytalkedtomeabouttheraneefbeinghonttOingnedaytmyhistoryeaehertalkedtomeabouttheimportaneeofbehonesBeeauseshefeaheredtethaetshemightfilaa邵iansheeouldnothelpfeeli吃enervousdfruringtttinriwvtu坠ingnervolhaurshemightlosetheehaneegainsheeouldnotpfhe更el-usdingheinterview50(5三个以上从句可简化为一个mmb:。)nathatwhinwaatgwhatnoydmotwaadinginitionhadatimmmbmySaltmthatatnagInioydadinginitionmotin3将两个或多个单句紧缩为一句Hmn。hufounidthtoeotthraSattoininthpouingain)Tohidiapoint-theddttinsogtaneHehugolefrriehetioninthePouringrainonlytofindthetrain2)ThTeexamresuresultcamoeoutsytesterdayItdismayedHnrenrytgreatlyheexamwlteameuteyeCerdaywadismayingHeoyegrealy3)WeansamheartilyintholterfthelakeThlakewascleandpeaeefulsW4ewamheatrartilyintheeeolwateroftheeletanandPeivaeefulIakeine)ItkpvasiningThflodwasresultedformaheexeesseraallfesThefloddeeountatedtheareaIthedwayripeningerpsoanddtryedotlesshomesflorTheingadnrseultingfreomtheexesesiveraindssevastatedtheareawash-wAayaipeingrPsotheanddestroyingiveraeounttleeshomsresultrofenexeessinsallfroheeouf!oddnevastatedtheareawash一ngawayipingeropsanddetyingtlesshomes第4句中的四个简单句用介词词组和分词词组简化为一个描。。绘性较强的单句何使句子简练练习1关于如何合并句子还可参照前几讲的内容。下一讲继续辅导如:Rewritethewo。rdysentencesbyusingaeombinationof,kills改t写句子使其尽量简洁1e(Shewonderedhow句breakrhene哪ShetothefmilyaShesatinhe)ld似)m23Shirlcyenr、ignnedteethere`。air①rntroetewHa、relunetoenttoHey城)lu`。edrrt。)n卿erkovertirne卿ntdimprovehi、h,,neesfporyn:nloi`4T。e}cmploenteenrwasnoisyandeofusingItwaserowded51ithnvtouojblotmn5ayindninotdomannpogamouthathingHliPpd〔山。hna!ivhhll67WmHSodtoaklohnldbkdThanitdIionndvocdhimotPtmocththmuityonhimmuh8ThThboka改hahopu巴thaontanitioomhildhodotmautiytiaultutementao9ManyrshTavwrittabosuttheevPoritaablemostheheadaehesofgorwing10heyelso15vedealwithinebilityfitdeveDaDiev沼肠户加irfens’z过nthtoryofboy’5lopmentIt15kgraetsetoanlnsuTheanlo一fwigoorPargarphsoenundsnwhrdysuandcm佣otontsouors󰀀Uecestsobnrdinevti叨oCtea悦Dauo川inidateocdrd)toinatioimpr15(eelemitotssuesajbhaeverbsojbov运用各类句子结构改写段落ae。ppefieldravfullunftionliesthasesumourPathHisnosrunsthorghitosDidhadshappytexpserneasehildfathHtrerdiedasabeofmanrehewax)rn乏sHisnetePfaheravwaidunaterneurelPersoltymewenamedMurdttoDwteav一5DledarnedwhaterueeanHydisa-eoveredwhaaunlosnelinasesasHeofhlmoouthowitfelthimtosetobehuLatterngFinllyhisrmohloetBeteydoPdShesenteh。〕1eDavidhadBloaneeHehadhisarrhdarefg叹wgashappilymAgtonietovAg’snesro刘ftunA”fterwasthdeahof“osm”“BlonadmiredvoseDanidgentlenselnsowihisChildwife一Hehadrnshis15readeersHeisadmiredfooneShisdenllSStionhi、friedsDaphaoodi〔bP介jr人继JalasicNohouldIt。1ProvereWitapbyar鳃ran“TheTVAnarehoor碑d。rson1LikeexBests”Imit󰀀yourdratfelimintingunne就所给题目写一段落修改时注意句子的简洁练习答案11tsecsywrsandPserionsin:Rewirteththeewoeordldyesnnitenseseybusingacombi”atiotonofskillsneSittinginrosheowrenderedohtwbraeektheswtohefamily23ShirleyHemonrreluluetantlyigonedorthoeptiaireonraetyvonteeredtwkvermetoimporvehishaneesofpro-tlon524oNiyneandeonuinntheempo[ymenteentrewaserwdedwitho5LagrarovrrusoeejblsmysflipPedformwssorehanneltoehanneltryingtofindsomepormthowatehing678Reeklewtmetx〕ondriveoersshouldbedeorniedlieensesHisdev〕t1头oionmmdtunityarwielekwoofeusnhimmonuehnsrespneethtthoelxakanhetthetraitiofronlehild-h图d9mauturityMaannyt。’thoevrshav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